Hump Day Hook #8

Welcome to the Hump Day Hook Hop for 12/19/12!

With this blog hop, each author posts one paragraph from a WIP or finished book for all to see. Then, it would be really cool if you could visit all the writers participating and comment on their paragraph!

This excerpt is from my current work in progress, Dearest Bloodiest Elizabeth, the sequel to Pulse and Prejudice, the vampire adaptation of Jane Austen's classic love story.  Because Pulse and Prejudice tells the story of Mr. Darcy, the plot follows him to London after leaving Elizabeth the day after the Netherfield ball; and much of it involves his relationship with his cousin Colonel Fitzwilliam.

The scene I have selected for today is a heated discussion between Darcy and Fitzwilliam. Those who have read Pulse and Prejudice may be surprised  by the changes in their relationship, which occur in the sequel....

   “We cannot pretend any longer," said Fitzwilliam.  You cannot deny your nature, what you are.  I wanted to believe – I convinced myself.”
   “It is not as you think!”  Darcy stood with such force that his heavy chair toppled over, and he turned his back on Fitzwilliam and stared out the window.  “That is not what I am.”
   “I noticed your lip has healed.  The moonlight I suppose.  You cannot deny what you are when it is plainly written on your face.”  Fitzwilliam reached again for the bottle and, as he splashed more brandy into the crystal, said, “If I were to call for pistols at dawn, would your wound fester all day until the moon came out?”
   “You assume you would win,” Darcy said.
   “I am in His Majesty’s army.  Perhaps I would like the opportunity to try.”

By the way, the concept of vampires being healed by moonlight was included in John Polidori's The Vampyre.

Love to know what you think! 

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Next up: Paloma Beck

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  1. Oh, I LOVE the inclusion of healing by moonlight! Wonderful little touch! Great hook!

  2. It's another great snippet. lol, my vampires cringe and say they want to stick with being healed by blood. The idea of having their wounds fester until a night falls didn't fill them with delight. But both me and them are hooked and looking forward to the next excerpt.

  3. Great Hook, nice tension in the scene. :)

  4. Through the tension, there's an underlying intimacy that drew me in.

  5. Wow! Very heated indeed! Great dialogue!

  6. Totally drawn in with the tension. Great hook


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